I never thought killing would come to me quite that easily.
It began as a hobby, during the Summer. Started so innocently too. I just lost my temper when I heard Spike barking his head off next door. Nobody was home so I just walked over there and shot the dog through the screen door.
The barking stopped but the taste of blood was tantalising! I decided I would do it again. The very next day, a skunk wandered into the yard. He didn’t get a chance to blink when my gun went off. That stench will hang around for a while though. Took quite a bit of cleaning too!
From there, an animal a week didn’t seem out of place. I fancy myself a vigilante of sorts. All those annoying creatures, out to disturb someone’s peace, well, they’ve got it coming now.
I suppose I should feel some remorse. What do you think?
Dennis looked up, smiling at Marianne.
Marianne stopped in mid-stride, cocked her head to one side and said, ‘Hmm, it’s not bad. But I would rewrite that last line. It takes the edge off the rest of the piece.’
Dennis reviewed the excerpt and nodded. “Yes, I think the killer should be ruthless. Thank you, my dear!”
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I wasn’t expecting this ending, guess it’s better this way! 🙂
Hahaha, this could easily be me. Writing the story I mean 😉
*Sigh of relief* It’s only fiction. Animals are thanking you everywhere 🙂
That God, it’s a fiction!
Glad this is only a story and no animals were actually harmed. However, I would question his state of mind possibly to write such cruel words. Hopefully only a fantasy and that he doesn’t act on it!
I felt sick about the the blood tasting. 😀 Loved the storyline. Your posts never stop to amaze me. 🙂
wow! kudos to your creative thinking. I was in shock there thinking how can an alternate angle come up there. But look at you..so wonderful 🙂
I think the blockquote gives it away a little. More that than the writing 🙂 Just as beautiful as your posts have been so far.
Aah! thank God that its someone writing fiction 😀 lovely little story Shailaja
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Thanks Sundari. I am truly enjoying your theme as well!
Lol. That was a good one 🙂
Thanks Jyotsna 😀
That was bloody good! Really enjoyed.
Thank you Ruchi 🙂
Thank God! It was a fiction in a fiction! 😀
Ha ha . looks like lots of people are relieved 🙂
Those were some really gory scenes you made me visualize. This was a twist I was happy about, though I did not guess this one.
P.S. If I remember correctly, there is a sequel in L. Kindly remember that we all love happy endings. 😉 😛
You DO have a good memory 😉 Yep, one sequel to the C for code post coming right up 🙂
Phew!! Thank god it was just a story!!
Kaleidoscope of Hopes
Thank god, indeed 🙂
A story within a story. Thank goodness. I knew godmother couldn’t be this kind of ruthless.
You do know me rather well, don’t you? 😉
After reading all your posts till now, I knew something was coming and it is good 🙂
Ha ha ha thanks Janaki 😀 Good to hear that!
Ah, this is cool! Like everyone else, I’m glad it was a story within a story – what a fun twist 🙂
Thank you so much, Charlotte <3
Relieved! Thank goodness it was just a script. Good twist!
Thank you Vidya 🙂
You should have a disclaimer stating ‘no animals were harmed in the creation of this story…’ 🙂
Will keep that in mind for the future 😉
Even though it’s fiction, I have a creepy feeling that Dennis is up to something . The description on killing the animal is chilling.
You sound like Debbie 😀 Even she believed he is up to no good 😉
that was interesting,
Thank you 🙂
Hahaha! I agree with Marianne. That last line did seem out of place! 😀
So relieved to know that nobody was really killing all those poor animals!
Good thing it was a story within a story then 😉
Gory even though it’s a story.
Yes, I know. Rather different for me 🙂
I was shocked by the first few sentences… afterwards I knew what you leading me too .. good attempt…
Glad you could guess it then, Angela 🙂 Thank you 🙂
God, S, I was wondering whether I should continue reading such a gruesome account! 🙂 (esp. as I have one of ‘those’ poor babies at home, and can’t stand reading such gory tales).But, at the end, was relieved….:-) You are the best – you know that? <3
Aww, I know. I was trying my hand at some gory fiction just to see the imagery I was able to create. Glad you didn’t stop reading 🙂 <3
…and then he shot her? 😉 Seems like a natural progression. LOL
Otherwise, I’m relieved too that no animals were actually hurt.
Ha ha, you’re more devious than I am 😉 Poor Marianne. No no, he’s just the writer 😉
Story within a story – superb twist Shailaja 🙂
Thank you, my love 🙂
I was like Laurel and relieved that no animals really got killed and that it was a story within the story. I did have to wonder about the state of mind of Marianne and Dennis though. Marianne seemed very blase about it all. Wouldn’t she worry about Dennis being disturbed? Hope he only writes about being a killer and doesn’t act on it. Poor Spike! Sniff! Good sinister writing. I like how you experiment with different types of stories, Shailaja. I like doing that, too, like that poem that I wrote the other day where the shepherd murdered the princess. Usually I prefer happy endings but that character was too jealous and full of rage to let her get away.
I know. I did wonder how the post would go over with animal lovers but realised that is the beauty of poetic license and fictionalising the threads in my mind. Yes, I am trying to tread some dark waters just to see the response that it gets. Thank you, Cat 🙂
I am glad it was a character. LOL Well, a character writing a character.
Wheels within wheels kind of situation, what? 😀
Nice! I confess I heaved a sigh of relief when I found that it was a fiction within a fiction… the animals are safe!
He he he, I wouldn’t really kill them in such cold blood, you know 😉