Eva swatted the mosquitoes away and drew closer to the crackling flames at the campsite. Across from her, Danny was narrating a ghost story about a werewolf or a vampire. She could never remember which was which.
She looked curiously around the group huddled there. Six adults and they were all hanging on Danny’s every word. Eva was the only one who was unaffected. Stories like this had no impact on her whatsoever.
But, that glow in the distance caught her fancy and she leaped to her feet.
Eva, no! Danny’s voice called out sternly. Dejected, she obeyed, dropping her chin on her paws.
©Shailaja V
Word count: 104
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Shailaja, Sweet story, and very creative using the POV of the dog. What a good dog to obey that well. I always suspected dogs understand more than we think they do. Well written. 🙂 —Susan
Thank you so much for a detailed and thoughtful comment, Susan. Yes, dogs seem so sensitive, don’t they?
Cleverly done!
Thank you kindly 🙂
Dear Shailaja, Great story and poor doggie – did he burn his tale? Ouch – I hear that really hurts and the balm they put on the burn tastes awful. Enjoyed it a lot!
Nan 🙂
Very pleased to hear that, Nan 🙂
Absolutely dramatic and spell binding writing:)
Ah, the paws, at the end of a tail (er, tale) that refreshes…. Randy
Ha ha ha.. double pun at play, I see 😉 Thank you
nice one 🙂 Makes me wonder if Snoopy understands what I say… who am I kidding? He understands everything… he just chooses not to obey.
Good twist at the end. I like the insight into the animal’s thoughts.
Sit Eva! Good dog.
Cute story, Shailaja.
Shalom,
Rochelle
I thought it was going to be a horror story but the ending took me by surprise. I have to say Mission Accomplished 🙂
I didn’t see that coming. Very clever.
Claire
I , too, like the others st campsite became engrossed in the story and you sprang a surprise.
Absolutely fun little twist to this 🙂
Such a cute story. Love it!
Didn’t see that coming now 😀 And, so the magic worked 😉 Good one Shailaja!
You did it again… Love how you incorporate ur twists
Loved it! Especially because of Eva!
Very clever! I wondered if perhaps she would be one or the other… but the punchline delivered a good surprise. I almost went with the light in the distance as well. So tempting… nice job!
LOL Well done! Love a “surprise” ending! 😉
I like your post!! I will definitely check out more of your writing.
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Thank you Elan! Much appreciated. Will check out your site soon!
Oh God!!! I didn’t even guess it was a dog!! Brilliant!! I have no words!!!
Thanks Shalini. That was the plan. Glad it worked 😀
I always get caught by these dog stories of yours. One day i shall guess before you tell.
Ah, will await that day with bated breath 😀
Vow!! Dog it is!!! Nice post
Thank you 🙂