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“You need to stop, Earl!”
Jus…one….more…. Agatha. It’s SOOOO good. . .
“You’re slurring and that’s never a good sign!”
Whatcha talkin’ bout?
“Go check your eyes. They’re red as a beet!”
Earl blinked. Always a tough thing when you had 12,000 eyes.
He smiled, I can still see your beautiful face, Aggie. . .
“Guess who’s sleeping on the couch tonight, Earl!”
Agatha turned, spread her iridiscent blue wings and left Earl staring after her.
He took one look at her retreating form and then back at the temptation before him.
One last drink won’t hurt.
With that, he settled on the next flower, dipped his head and slurped up the heavenly nectar.
Written for the fortnight-long blogging challenge, Barathon, 2018
This time, I’m writing flash fiction on the different prompts of each day.
Word count will be a multiple of 11 😉
Today’s Word Count: 110
This was wonderful, Shailaja. Simply loved it! I’m trying my hand at fiction and realising that I have a long way to go before I get a hang of it.
Fun twists is the theme, eh?
I was breaking my head thinking it was some insect since you mentioned the eyes. Enjoyed it thoroughly. 🙂
sweet banter and what lovely imagery 🙂 I LIKE!
This was awesome! I’m loving your take on the prompts! You wrote the best flash fiction!
Aha! That’s a great twist. Didnt realize that they’d be butterflies/bees!
12000 eyes! fascinating indeed. Cute story Shailaja:)
Cute as ever. Made me smile.
Ha ha thanks 🙂
Wow! A microfiction that is par excellence. Brilliantly woven, Shailaja. I read it twice to understand that you are referring to butterflies.
Thanks Rohan!
That was cute. I love how it was bugs drinking nectar.
Thank you, Pat 🙂
I knew the note which began with that cute naughtiness would have a very funny signature twist of yours!
I just love how it turned out. You’re a genius, Shailaja.
Thanks Ashvini 🙂
Your flash fiction is the best, Shailaja. First line into your post and I knew there is going to be a fun twist at the end and there it was. 🙂
Loved the story, the revelation and the smart more on the word count. Very cool! 🙂
Thank you, Parul 🙂
Learnt so many new things today, the first and foremost being about the butterfly with 12000 eyes 😍 And of course, I can never stop learning the art of flash fiction from you. ❤
Aww thank you so much, Mithila 🙂
Knowing you, I was eagerly waiting for the twist to pop up. And it did! Loved this sweet fiction, Shailaja! 😀
Ha ha have my twists become predictable now? 😉 Must change that.
Thanks, Vinitha 🙂
Wow, thats a great take on the prompt!
Thanks, Zainab 🙂
Excellent denouement. Loved the dialogue as well.
Thank you, Varad 🙏
Haha…I liked your take on the prompt. You always know how to hook us with your flash fiction. Also, it’s good to know we can allude to the prompt and not have to use it in the post {I was a bit confused about that}.
Thank you! Yes, I’d mentioned that in the rules on the kick off post 😀
Great twist at the end. A brilliant take on the prompt. I love your fiction stories. Happy BarAThon.
Thank you Vasantha 😊
Great twist! Getting drunk on nectar seems a good idea to me!
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Thanks Meena!
Yes Shailaja.. It’s my first time. Thank you.
Glad to have you here. 🙂
That is really too many :D. I had not anticipated this twist.
Thanks, Bhagyashree 🙂
Oh..a drunk butterfly 😀 it’s so funny…
He he I did research and everything about butterflies before writing. Apparently, they DO get drunk just before winter sets in 😀