Enraptured by her form, she twirled on the silvery web.
“Don’t I look amazing?”
Her voice drifted over to her mate, who yawned. “You’ve got some weight on you, love.”
Freezing in mid-twirl, her foot settled on his tiny body. Afterwards, she licked her fangs.
He should have known better.
Moral: Keep your counsel to yourself and thus stay away from trouble.
19 thoughts on “Just Desserts- Flash Fiction”
Thank you, Meha ?
Good one!! Loved it 🙂
Hehehe… love the ‘moral of the story’bit at the end… really drives in the nail!
Aww thanks, Soumya 🙂
Hahaha, men and their unwanted counsel! Well deserved. The black widow should take a bow as should you for writing this so beautifully!
Thanks, Gayathri 🙂 They may never learn. That’s the truth 😉
He certainly was. If only he’d thought before he spoke 😉 Thanks, Rachna!
They don’t. Believe me, they don’t!
Ah ha – the Black Widow. Men! They never learn.
Ah the black widow! He was treading a tight rope, wasn’t he? Delightful! 🙂
This was so close to home. When will they learn? And I love how you can put it all in the correct form, yet leaving a lingering imagery.
Thank you, Parul 🙂
Haha! They never know what to say and when to keep shut! 😛
That’s so interesting. Glad to see you back in on this grid. 🙂
Thank you, Anamika 🙂 Oh the male is dead. Consumed by the female black widow.
It was funny. I wonder what is going to be the male’s fate now.
You’re right about the dangling participle and the foot! I actually rewrote that part 5 times and just couldn’t get it to sound smooth enough without compromising on the word count.
Did I tell you I love your feedback? 🙂
I like how you didn’t ever have to say “spiders” to show us the anthropomorphized animals. The only place I struggled was at “Freezing in mid-twirl, her foot settled…” because with that dangling participle it sounds like her foot was twirling all by itself!
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