Enraptured by her form, she twirled on the silvery web.

“Don’t I look amazing?”

Her voice drifted over to her mate, who yawned. “You’ve got some weight on you, love.”

Freezing in mid-twirl, her foot settled on his tiny body. Afterwards, she licked her fangs.

Deliberately.

He should have known better.

***

Moral: Keep your counsel to yourself and thus stay away from trouble.


 

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19 thoughts on “Just Desserts- Flash Fiction

  1. I like how you didn’t ever have to say “spiders” to show us the anthropomorphized animals. The only place I struggled was at “Freezing in mid-twirl, her foot settled…” because with that dangling participle it sounds like her foot was twirling all by itself!

    1. Thank you!

      You’re right about the dangling participle and the foot! I actually rewrote that part 5 times and just couldn’t get it to sound smooth enough without compromising on the word count.

      Did I tell you I love your feedback? 🙂

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