Haughtily, he breezed in
Twisting, turning, circumambulating my prone form;
He stood there, with a devilish leer,
Brow creased in an unholy sneer,
Waiting for me to crack
But I valiantly resisted;
With a shrug, he left
Taking his nightmares with him.
©Shailaja V
Word count: 42
What came in through the bedroom window?
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Thank you for this -” circumambulating”…I didn’t know this word though I do this very often 🙂
Oh, you’re most welcome 🙂
Love the used of adjectives and rhyme in this and thanks for the new word – circumambulating.
yay! Good should always triumph over evil!
That pic is just so darn creepy!! And so was this piece (in a good way)! Glad he left!! lol
Now that’s one way to stand-up to fear. You can’t waiver! Well done.
Very true 🙂
Creepy! Eerie! What do I say…? Lovely take on the prompt Shailaja.
Thank you Geeta 🙂
I’m so glad you stood up to him! Great write.
Thank you! 🙂
very creepy. that picture might give me nightmares!
Aww, not really. He looks cute 😉
I love the line, “circumambulating my prone form”. And like Rowan said, you surprised me with the direction you took this piece. I thought it was going to be about a different kind of darkness. Karen
I hope it was a pleasant kind of a surprise 🙂
Oooh, that wasn’t where I thought you were going with that one!
Aha! The ploy worked, I see 🙂
Devilishly good!
Awww, you flatterer, you 🙂
Nightmares? I would like to think the devil, personally.
That’s one reason I left it open. Although I technically thought of nightmares and even a molester at one point, this would leave the interpretation up to the readers. Thanks for reading 🙂
I love the way you imagined this! My first thought with the prompt was about nightmares, but I couldn’t get it right. I think you nailed it. (He stood there, with a devilish leer…)
Thank you so much <3
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Thank you so much, Shashank! Very touched by this. I will accept it, but I will need some time to write the post, perhaps the weekend. Thanks again 🙂
Oh, how much I love your creepy stories 🙂 🙂
Thank you Shalini 🙂 I aim to please <3
Glad he left–although I wonder if he’ll be back.
Oh, I think he will. And will she survive the next one?
You win this time! I love that shrug, though it portends another round…
Exactly! The point is, how much longer can she fight? Good eye there 😉
Gotta resist!
Oh yes! Without it, what would we be?
At least he left! I hate nightmares…
I would have to agree with you there. Can’t stand them myself.
True…it’s all about standing strong through the darkest hour…lovely…
Yep. Invariably so 🙂 Thanks Shelly!
well that is how it works, we stand tall and suddenly all that we were afraid of vanishes …
Yes, it just takes that first step, right? Thanks Bikram 🙂
Bad devil! 😀
Remind you of someone? 😉
I like this..indeed. I am quite attracted to creepy stories. Remind me on fb about a message I have. Its different short 2 lines that can creep you out !
PhenoMenon
Ooh! I have read those. Pretty good ones, actually 😀
eerie… thats pretty much the truth of all our fears though, isnt it? standing up to them till they back down…
Yep, pretty much sums it up 🙂