The angels sat around in a grumpy circle. Brows drawn, wings askew in petulant annoyance, they churlishly bickered over who would tell Him.
In He walked and saw their orb of downcast faces. What ails you all? he asked in surprise.
Dennis sinned, blurted out Ariel.
Dennis and Edna sinned, corrected Duma.
God smiled, They are but children. Let them be.They must be repenting it by now.
But, Haniel, the guardian angel of the Tree of Life, couldn’t take it anymore.
It was all that Eve’s fault, he spluttered. That mad woman!
God benevolently replied, ‘Mad as Adam’.
©Shailaja V
Word Count: 99
Something I wanted to try today was to use palindromes and weave a short piece around them.
Notice the words in bold font.
Even the word count is a palindrome 🙂
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A lovely take on the first couple and the use of palindromes woven into the rich tapestry of your story. excellent Shailaja
Thank you very much, Kalpana <3
I only caught the last palindrome! Love the brevity and the word play! So much said in so few words.
Thank you so much for the kind comment 🙂
Palindromes–wow. That seems really difficult. Nice job 🙂
It really isn’t. Not when you have a list of palindromes to choose from 😉
Succint and apt
Thank you 🙂
Another gem scripted:)
Thanks for the praise 🙂
That’s a really good one, Shailaja! Getting fancy there with palindromes and all 😉 Keep it going. You are becoming quite a master at this flash fiction thing, lots of punch in just a few words!
Fancy, eh? 😀 I never thought of that. I was just in the mood to try out palindromes 😀
Wow. Good one Shailaja 🙂
Thanks Jyotsna 😀
That’s an emotive piece :'(
This one? Or the one on Daily Ritual?
I said that about ‘Daily Ritual’, the page is not allowing me to comment there…
Oh thanks 🙂 I wonder why though! I am getting other comments there.
Lemme try again…
<3 the fair-mindedness.
Thank you Mridubala 🙂
That’s a good one, Shailaja! 🙂
Thanks Shilpa 🙂
Wow.
Thank you 🙂
😀 The classic tale.
Shailaja V (in bold letters) is not a palindrome
Ok..just kidding! Mmuah!
Noted and changed 😉