Reaching Out

 

Heart weeping

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Lungs pounding
Retching at the sight of blackened walls

Mind spinning
Bombarded by desire’s cavernous clutches

The addict attempts
To
Rise
But falls back
into
Temptation’s yawning, greedy chasm

Normalcy watches like a supercilious angel

Β©Shailaja V
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Written for the Yeah Write Gargleblaster Challenge #163

69 thoughts on “Reaching Out

  1. Guess all readers have told it all. But still worth saying…nice one…you make me refer dictionary each time i read you…tks to introduce new words and for sowing the addiction to read…

  2. Normalcy is always alone. As a cigarette smoker who has tried to quit and stay quit, this hits close to home. Thanks for this.

  3. Fantastic take on the prompt. Wonderful descriptions – yawning greed vs supercilious normal, and the addict’s never-ending fight. Love it.

  4. I love the very physical terms you use to describe the mental struggle and anguish. Very cool. thanks for linking this up, and congrats on the new blog – it looks great!

  5. I like the visceral elements you wove in, with the weeping heart, pounding lungs, and retching. For me it makes the attempt to climb in the last stanza feel like the sweaty, arduous task it is to fight addiction. Well done!

  6. Normalcy is highly overrated in my book : ) Amazing opening “Copious litres of saffron hue” is entrancing.

  7. Congratulations on your new blog Shailaja! Such a strong punch packed in these few words…wow πŸ™‚

  8. “The addict attempts to rise but falls back”….that’s such an accurate description. How do you manage to say so much in 42 words? πŸ™‚ Very impressive! And all the best with the new blog!

  9. Loved the way you have expressed this.. “Temptation’s yawning, greedy chasm,
    Normalcy watches like a supercilious angel!
    Wonderfully written, Shailaja! And like this new blog of yours. Congratulations! β™₯

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