It’s so much better on the road.
Kayla glanced down at his tousled mop of hair, his dirt-streaked cheek, patted his clean one and replied,
It’s too dangerous, my love.
His mutinous brows frowned as he stood in his go-kart, arms akimbo.
©Shailaja V
Word count: 42
This week’s question: Why don’t we do it in the road?
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Awww. Poor kid. But safe kid! Nice little story in your loving 42 words.
Thanks Meg. Missed seeing you here 🙂
I can always tell how carefully and lovingly you picked your words, Shailaja. Akimbo, mutinous, dirt-streaked and my favorite in this piece: go-kart. It was so surprising to read that amongst your rich vocabulary and it instantly nailed down a setting in my head. Wonderful!
I think you just about made my week with that comment! Thank you so much. I love Akimbo too and was waiting to use it in the right context 🙂
Oh, this is so much fun! Nicely done. 🙂
Thanks a bunch, Suzanne! <3
Made me think of my son. You captured that youthful innocence and search for fun 🙂
Yay! Mission accomplished 🙂
Great writing Shailaja 🙂
Thank you very much, Sheethal 🙂
Loved “akimbo” 🙂
Ha ha, I think many people did 😉 Thanks Mridubala!
Loved it.. 🙂
Thanks Shalini!
He’s going to sneak out and try again, soon! Loved it, Shailaja!
What! And defy the mother? Yeah, you’re probably right 😉
Great piece of writing, Shailaja. He was a budding rebel 🙂
Oh yes,you better believe it !
I like the picture you painted here. I especially like “akimbo” – what a fun word it is. Fun to write, fun to read, fun to say. Nice job here!
I know! I was thinking that too. Some words just lend themselves to be written and savoured and lingered over 🙂 Thanks for the kind comment!
True rebel without a cause! Love the dishevelled imagery that you give your guy.
Yeah, I kind of liked the idea of a rowdy-looking imp 😉
What must he have felt! Intelligent weave around the post!
Thank you Naba <3
yes, too dangerous to try on the road..good one!
Exactly. But, fun, right? 🙂
So much fun it would be 😀
I know! Wish mom would let him go 😉
Made me crack, Shailja
I am glad, Shweta 😀
Not on the road for sure. Nice Shailaja.
But of course. The mom in us thinks alike 🙂
What a punch in 42 words ;).. !
He he he thanks 😀
Fun! Love it. 🙂
Thank you, Laurel <3
A beautiful take:)
Thank you 🙂
You crack me up. This made me smile. Good use of the prompt.
Ah, yes, those reckless rebels, those bad boys who are fun and dangerous in the moment, but not very good husband material.
http://cattitudeandgratitude.blogspot.ca/2014/08/its-time-to-slow-down.html
Never thought of it that way. Maybe they are just rebels as kids, but outgrow it as they grow up?
I know exactly how that guy felt! 😀
Why am I not surprised? 😉
Nicely done. (-:
Thank you 🙂
I write short stories too, so I appreciate the work they take. This was quirky and cute.
I am planning a Fiction Link up on the blog each month. Would you be interested to link up? 🙂
Possibly, but I’m not sure exactly what you mean. What would a ‘link up’ entail?
You will write to a prompt, post it on your blog and link up the post via linky tools on my blog.
Oh! I might be interested from time to time. I have a pretty set schedule for my blog, but if any of your prompts fit into it I’d be happy to join in.
Wonderful! Will let you know once the plan is firmed up. 🙂
Thank you. (-: My blog is http://www.justinaluther.wordpress.com if you’re interested in taking a look.