Here I stand, open to the world.
My heart bursts open
Expelling my grief,
Screaming in outrage,
‘This is unfair’
As I see the body lie beneath my gaze.
He’s gone.
Silenced
Frozen
Unmoving,
Here I stand.
Here I stand, open to the world.
My heart bursts open
Expelling my grief,
Screaming in outrage,
‘This is unfair’
As I see the body lie beneath my gaze.
He’s gone.
Silenced
Frozen
Unmoving,
Here I stand.
I can feel the sadness in the latter part of your story, but “My heart burst open” made me think you were going the other way. Was that intentional? Were you playing a little sleight-of-hand there?
I suppose you could say that- the heart wants to do it but is silenced. Either way, the grief is visible.
I love the idea of being raw and open and accepting of your anger. Well said.
Thank you 🙂
The raw emotions of grief and calling a spade a spade hits the reader. Very well put across , Shailaja.
Thanks Kalpana!
So sad…and real.
Deep and intense
Thank you, Ruby.
I liked it up until the last line…and then I think you completely baffled me to be honest. Very emotional and moving….your emotions raw…I get that…and I get why. If you chopped off the last line…this would and could be great, but then you wouldn’t have made word count.
The last line reinforces the reason for my being this way, since it’s the only way I know. Open and honest in my grief. I’m sorry that did not come across.
I like how you slide from “He’s gone” to “Here I stand” – the words you chose can describe both of you.
Thanks Christine. I was trying to tie the two together.
It really does feel like that, sometimes.
Very much so.
Very moving.
Thank you
Sometimes tragedies are beyond tears. That was beautifully said.
Thanks Tulika
So much grief and pain.
It’s raw right now. Just lost someone close
The last line ties it all so well!
Thank you so much 🙂
A recent tragedy makes me appreciate it even more.
It’s the reality of life that humbles us and keeps us grounded, right, Anand? Thanks for reading and so sorry for your loss as well.
Yes it does…and it hardens us too. As real world needs compete with emotional trauma…in almost all cases, they win.
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